Dirge of hope
A futile attempt, an escape from the shell
Inhibited in the narrowness, echo of the yell
Trapped in the obscurities, a vision of the hell
Deluged deep inside, a ghastly deep well
A patient without patience, stifled in the cell
Ensnared in the horror, where the wicked dwell
Shadows of distant cries, impossible to quell
Deluged deep inside, a ghastly deep well
Distant voices felt close, hoping someone would tell
Why trapped in Misery?! Why cope the foul smell?!
Smell of Vexatious life, Only god could foretell
Deluged deep inside, a ghastly deep well
Deafening silence broke, someone rang the bell
A spurt of light in the dark, felt the heart swell
A lady in white loomed, senses started to impel
Deluged deep inside, a ghastly deep well
Grabbed by her force, escaped the death knell
Began to climb up, determined as a rebel
Dead hopes went alive, thusly bid farewell
Deluged deep inside, a ghastly deep well
Allayed by her grace, relishing the mirthful travel
Sight of the light closing in, see the world ravel
A grave voice struck, you or her! and then I fell
Just about to come out, of a ghastly deep well
A patient without patience, stifled in the cell
Ensnared in the horror, where the wicked dwell
Shadows of distant cries, impossible to quell
Deluged deep inside, a ghastly deep well
Distant voices felt close, hoping someone would tell
Why trapped in Misery?! Why cope the foul smell?!
Smell of Vexatious life, Only god could foretell
Deluged deep inside, a ghastly deep well
Deafening silence broke, someone rang the bell
A spurt of light in the dark, felt the heart swell
A lady in white loomed, senses started to impel
Deluged deep inside, a ghastly deep well
Grabbed by her force, escaped the death knell
Began to climb up, determined as a rebel
Dead hopes went alive, thusly bid farewell
Deluged deep inside, a ghastly deep well
Allayed by her grace, relishing the mirthful travel
Sight of the light closing in, see the world ravel
A grave voice struck, you or her! and then I fell
Just about to come out, of a ghastly deep well
Bahut hi zayaada bhaari hai
ReplyDeletemere jaison ki to jaan hi nikal jaaye :)
well jokes apart.
Written very well, but I am not here to praise you as people will do that.
Mujhe mera kaam theek se karne do
and it all about how ans what i felt
The first things I felt, that is it very abstract poem.
Though its gr8 to have that kind to talent, but for sure you wont get kind of audience.
with all this stuff sometime try to write light mood poems, that will surely increase your number of audience.
its not done yet but yahan pe teri le nahi sakta. :)
Keep doing good job
i really liked the imagery u have created through your words..
ReplyDeleteBut to be frank..I believe the title could have been a little more profound..
keep posting...
AKKI: !! :-D
ReplyDeleteDeba: Please suggest.. i really couldn't think of anything..
Very well written. "A patient, without patience.." nice word-play indeed :)
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